Question 9 (Essay Worth 10 points)
(HC)

Read the following article on Gertrude Elion. Then, read the summary that follows. You will notice that the summary is incorrectly written. In this lesson, you learned six rules for writing an effective summary. Using this information, make three specific suggestions that would improve this ineffective summary.

Important note: Do NOT write a summary. You will write three suggestions for improving this summary. Your suggestions must be based on the six rules of effective summaries that you learned in the lesson.



Complete article from Encyclopedia Britannica

U.S. pharmacologist (one who studies drug interactions) Gertrude B. Elion received the Nobel prize for medicine in 1988 along with George H. Hitchings and Sir James W. Black. The three were awarded the prize for their development of drugs used to treat several major diseases.

Gertrude Belle Elion was born on Jan. 23, 1918, in New York City. She graduated from Hunter College in New York City with a degree in biochemistry in 1937. Unable to obtain a graduate research position because she was a woman, she took a series of jobs, including lab assistant, chemistry and physics teacher in New York City high schools, and research chemist. During this time she also took classes at New York University, where she earned a master's degree in 1941. Because she could not devote herself to full-time studies, Elion never received a doctorate.

In 1944 Elion joined the Burroughs Wellcome Laboratories (now part of GlaxoSmithKline (a company that makes prescription medicines)). There she was first the assistant and then the colleague of Hitchings, with whom she worked for the next four decades. Elion and Hitchings developed an array (variety) of new drugs that were effective against leukemia, autoimmune disorders, urinary-tract infections, gout, malaria, and viral herpes. Their success was due primarily to their innovative (characterized by new or unique) research methods. Rather than using the trial-and-error approach used by previous pharmacologists, Elion and Hitchings examined the difference between the biochemistry of normal human cells and that of cancer cells, bacteria, viruses, and other pathogens (disease-causing agents). They used this information to create drugs that could target a particular pathogen without harming the human host's normal cells. Their methods enabled them to eliminate much of the guesswork and wasted effort typical in previous drug research.

Although Elion officially retired in 1983, she helped oversee the development of azidothymidine (AZT), the first drug used in the treatment of AIDS. In 1991 she was awarded a National Medal of Science and was inducted into the National Women's Hall of Fame. She died on Feb. 21, 1999, in Chapel Hill, N.C.



Student J. Doe's Summary

Gertrude Elion was born in 1918 in New York City. She went to school for many years and eventually won the Nobel prize. She was unable to obtain a graduate research position because she was a woman. She took a series of jobs, including lab assistant, chemistry and physics teacher in New York City high schools, and research chemist. She was a scientist who helped discover many important drugs that saved lives. Elion also discovered new ways to test drugs. She died in 1999, 16 years after she retired from Burroughs Wellcome Laboratories.I think she was a terrific scientist.

Answer:

Hey there,

So, I see here that there is a passage to read, and that there is already a summary by a "person" called (J. Doe's).. I am suppose to (improve) his summary.

His summary states: Gertrude Elion was born in 1918 in New York City. She went to school for many years and eventually won the Nobel prize. She was unable to obtain a graduate research position because she was a woman. She took a series of jobs, including lab assistant, chemistry and physics teacher in New York City high schools, and research chemist. She was a scientist who helped discover many important drugs that saved lives. Elion also discovered new ways to test drugs. She died in 1999, 16 years after she retired from Burroughs Welcome Laboratories.I think she was a terrific scientist.

The 6 steps for an effective essay would be the following:

Brainstorming

Dramatic opening paragraph

Variety of ideas

Variety of techniques

Flow

Dramatic final paragraph

So by (improving this essay) would be the following.

Gertrude Elion was born in 1918 in New York City.  She was unable to obtain a graduate research position because she was a woman. She took a series of jobs, including lab assistant, chemistry and physics teacher in New York City high schools, and research chemist. In 1944 Elion joined the Burroughs Welcome Laboratories (now part of Glaxo Smith Kline (a company that makes prescription medicines).  She was a scientist who helped discover many important drugs that saved lives. Elion also discovered new ways to test drugs. She died in 1999, 16 years after she retired from Burroughs Welcome Laboratories.I think she was a terrific scientist.

(Not sure of you noticed, but, i improved this essay by showing the (D.O.B) and her achievement's and what happened in her life and also the things that she could not do. The other essay was not so good because it stated to things of her twice. You dont want to her is twice. So I shortened it down and from there the essay is basically (updated) and improved.

I really hope this helps.

Explanation:

In “Paul Revere's Ride” what happens directly before Paul Revere starts his ride to alert people that the British are coming?

Revere discusses the plan with his friend.
Revere feels the morning coming in Concord.
Revere travels through the town of Medford.
Revere sees the light shining from the church tower.

Hey read This and do this for me and tell me everything you learned
Type in stray by cynthia rylant on google serch and watch that video and use this The stray peice

PLZ HELP
Which of the following are poetic structures marked by line length and rhyme? Mark all that apply.

quatrains
couplets
synecdoche
personifications

We were all ranked together at the valuation. Men and women, old and young, married and single, were ranked with horses, sheep, and swine. There were horses and men, cattle and women, pigs and children, all holding the same rank in the scale of being, and all were subjected to the same narrow examination. Silvery-headed age and sprightly youth, maids and matrons had to undergo the same indelicate inspection. At this moment, I saw more clearly than ever the brutalizing effects of slavery upon both slave and slaveholder."

When Douglass says that "silvery-headed age and sprightly youth, maids and matrons, had to undergo the same indelicate inspection," what contrast is Douglass creating?
A. Douglass is contrasting the way young people were treated compared to the way older people
B. Douglass is contrasting young people with old people
C. Douglass is contrasting the peoples beauty with their negative treatment

Can pandas eat chocolate without getting sick?
(no using google)
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When you know a trap has been set and watch someone walk into it.

situational irony
verbal irony
dramatic irony

If your essay is 1,200 words long, and the editorial guidelines suggest a word range between 2,000-3,000 words, what should you do?

Which traits are weakest in your autobiographical narrative: ideas, organization, voice, word choice, sentence fluency, or conventions?

always remember this: ignorance is bliss.

Which topic should appear in a conclusion?(1 point)

an introduction to your main ideas

the ideas you want your readers to remember

a transition to your next ideas on the topic

reasons and examples supporting your main ideas

what are the “up and down feelings” that Brian experiences from using the contents of the survival pack in chapter 18 and 19 of hatchet

NARRATOR’S VOICE

At the sound of the road and the flash of light it will be precisely six-forty-three PM on Maple Street.
At this moment one of the little boys, Tommy, looks up to listen to a sound of a tremendous screeching roar from overhead. A flash of light plays on both their faces and then it moves down the street past lawns and porches and rooftops and then disappears.

4.LONG ANGLE SHOT — LOOKING DOWN THE STREET4.

As various people leave their porches and stop what they’re doing to stare up at the sky.

—The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street,
Rod Serling

Based on the stage directions, how should readers visualize the residents of Maple Street? Choose the two best descriptions.

a. yelling at the sky
b. running to seek shelter
c. paying attention to the noise and flash of light
d. ignoring the noise and flash of light
e. looking up at the sky

The major theme of Thank you, M'am is kindness and trust can bring positive change in an individual. In 1 or 2 well constructed paragraphs, analyze how this theme is developed in the story. Use 2 or more pieces of texual evidence to support your answer

Question: Which of these are the reasons WHY Ruth Bader Ginsburg gained many admirers throughout her career?
1. She declined to retire in 2014 when many liberals encouraged her to do so.
2. She displayed strength and resilience during personal health crises.
3. She argued six important cases before the Supreme Court in the 1970s, winning five.
4. She defended the rights of women and minorities throughout her career.
(A) 2 only
(B) 1 and 4
(C) 1 and 3
(D) 2, 3 and 4

PLEASE ONLY ANSWER IF YOU KNOW THE ANSWER OR HAVE A DECENT IDEA OF WHAT YOU THINK THE ANSWER IS!

Sorry, the attachment might be tiny, use a magnifying glass or some glasses ._.

Independent or dependent clause?

"Unless I receive a confirmation from you by December 21st"

Look at the word list provided above. Copy the long vowel words into the space below.

Word Bank:
separate
explain
variety
dialogue
accuse
occupation
explode
approach
succeed
supreme
chronicle
knowledgeable
chauffeur
threatening

Just great. I was really hoping my game would be cancelled after practicing for it all week."

situational irony
verbal irony
dramatic irony

#help and read the question on the picture.

“Crack” went the bat as the pitcher hit a home run.

personification
metaphor
onomatopoeia
hyperbole

1. What does it mean to organize the concepts for a topic?

creating a piece for the audience to read

finding a way to group the information

presenting an idea or new information

reading an audience and deciding on a strategy


2. What is the topic of an informational writing piece?

the way you group information

the formal meanings of words

information and how it is organized

the subject or focus of your writing


3. For each organizational strategy you choose, you must make sure that it

has headings, charts, and tables.

makes sense for your audience.

is something that you are interested in.

is organized into a common group or category.


4.Doron has done his research and has selected the organizational strategy of definition. He has also brainstormed his topic of the Mandarin language to activate his overall thoughts. What is Doron’s next step in writing his informational article?

begin to work on his body paragraphs

decide on a good title

make an outline

write his introduction

explain what connections do you see between Ha's situation and the information read about the Vietnam Wars ? 5 to 6 sentences pleaseeeeeee help ASAP
Pleaseeeee

ASAP.

To develop an essay, the writer should start by


a.brainstorming.

b.revising.

c.restating.

d.summarizing.

BRAINLIEST AND 20 POINTS HELP ASAP PLEASE!!!!!!
Read the text then answer the question that follows:

Wild animals as viewed from a mountain camp—Camille Grant, October 2011

Through my binoculars, I viewed a group of wild animals in action. A pride of lions was sleeping when a small, yellow bus pulled up beside them. Tourists on a safari were packed into the bus like sardines in a can. Armed with cameras, they invaded the lions' territory, hoping to capture the perfect photograph. The crowd leaned out the windows, hooting and hollering, until the lions awoke. When the lions moved away, the bus rolled after them, relentlessly stalking the pride. One of the lions turned and roared to protect the young. This was greeted with cheers and a celebratory honk of the bus horn. The curious visitors observed the lions' routine for an hour before moving on. Leaving a cloud of dust, the bus headed away, taking the wild animals off to disturb someone else's home.

Review the following line from the text:

Tourists who had paid money for a safari were packed into the bus like sardines in a can.

Which statement is true?
The sentence features figurative language in the form of a metaphor.
The sentence features figurative language in the form of a simile.
The sentence features literal language in the form of a metaphor.
The sentence features literal language in the form of simile.

Read the excerpt below. Which of the following statements best summarizes the main idea of the excerpt?

question 1:
In 1944 Elion joined the Burroughs Wellcome Laboratories (now part of GlaxoSmithKline (a company that makes prescription medicines)). There she was first the assistant and then the colleague of Hitchings, with whom she worked for the next four decades. Elion and Hitchings developed an array (variety) of new drugs that were effective against leukemia, autoimmune disorders, urinary tract infections, gout, malaria, and viral herpes.
1 Elion believed that new drugs could be developed to help people.
2 Elion had to work for Hitchings because she was a woman.
3 Elion worked hard for more than 40 years to earn money for retirement.
4 Elion and her colleagues were responsible for developing important drugs.
question 2:
Read the following paragraph. How does sentence 4 develop the main idea of the paragraph?

Gertrude Belle Elion was born on Jan. 23, 1918, in New York City.
She graduated from Hunter College in New York City with a degree in biochemistry in 1937.
Unable to obtain a graduate research position because she was a woman, she took a series of jobs, including lab assistant, chemistry and physics teacher in New York City high schools, and research chemist.
During this time she also took classes at New York University, where she earned a master's degree in 1941.
Because she could not devote herself to full-time studies, Elion never received a doctorate.
1 This sentence tells readers where she went to school for her doctorate degree.
2 This sentence shows Elion's determination and commitment to learn.
3 This sentence shows that Elion had to try many schools to get accepted into one.
4 This sentence proves the idea that Elion had to learn biochemistry in unusual ways.

The water was a glove that enveloped the swimmer’s body.

simile
metaphor
alliteration
personification

The Giver:

What I Would Gain? (by keeping the memory): What I Would Lose? (if I lost the memory)

1. Pain:

2. Sadness:

3. Unhappiness:

4. Fear:

5. Grief:

6. Loneliness:


do it from your point of view pls help me

The doctor was so pleased with the new specimen that he gave Effie a shilling, and presently the professor stepped round. He stayed to lunch, and he and the doctor quarreled very happily all the afternoon about the name and the family of the thing that had come out of Effie's eye.

But at teatime another thing happened. Effie's brother Harry fished something out of his tea, which he thought at first was an earwig. He was just getting ready to drop it on the floor, and end its life in the usual way, when it shook itself in the spoon—spread two wet wings, and flopped onto the tablecloth. There it sat, stroking itself with its feet and stretching its wings, and Harry said: "Why, it's a tiny newt!"
BRAINLIEST AND 45 POINTS



The professor leaned forward before the doctor could say a word. "I'll give you half a crown for it, Harry, my lad," he said, speaking very fast; and then he picked it up carefully on his handkerchief.

"It is a new specimen," he said, "and finer than yours, Doctor."

It was a tiny lizard, about half an inch long—with scales and wings.

So now the doctor and the professor each had a specimen, and they were both very pleased. But before long these specimens began to seem less valuable. For the next morning, when the knife-boy was cleaning the doctor's boots, he suddenly dropped the brushes and the boot and the blacking, and screamed out that he was burnt.

And from inside the boot came crawling a lizard as big as a kitten, with large, shiny wings.

"Why," said Effie, "I know what it is. It is a dragon like the one St. George killed."

And Effie was right. That afternoon Towser was bitten in the garden by a dragon about the size of a rabbit, which he had tried to chase, and the next morning all the papers were full of the wonderful "winged lizards" that were appearing all over the country. The papers would not call them dragons, because, of course, no one believes in dragons nowadays—and at any rate the papers were not going to be so silly as to believe in fairy stories. At first there were only a few, but in a week or two the country was simply running alive with dragons of all sizes, and in the air you could sometimes see them as thick as a swarm of bees. They all looked alike except as to size. They were green with scales, and they had four legs and a long tail and great wings like bats' wings, only the wings were a pale, half-transparent yellow, like the gear-boxes on bicycles.

According to the bolded text, how did the characters react to the creature?
With interest
With fear
With indifference
With disgust

STEVE Doesn’t make sense. Why should the power go off all of a sudden and the phone line? DON Maybe some kind of an electrical storm or something. CHARLIE That doesn’t seem likely. Sky’s just as blue as anything. Not a cloud. No lightning. No thunder. No nothing. How could it be a storm? —The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street, Rod Serling What is Charlie’s perspective about why the power is out? An electrical storm is responsible. Aliens are responsible. Aliens are not responsible. An electrical storm is not responsible.

A man works hard for many years to save for retirement; on his last day of work he is given a lottery ticket worth millions.

situational irony
verbal irony
dramatic irony

When preparing for a writing assignment, what Study Skill helps you see how ideas are related to the subject and to each other?

pair share
clustering
reading aloud
revising